| Author | Message | ||
| Christopher T George
Intermediate Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1223 Registered: 12-2004 |
Sequined Glove Through the California legal system rigamarole of metal detectors, the aging man-child passes. Pale makeup today, a blank look, mutated surgically. Ooh, baby, baby Where did our love go? A fan releases a white dove for each acquittal, others throw confetti, the verdict a marriage contract between star and fans-- I'll reach out my hand to you, I'll have faith in all you do, just call my name and I'll be there. Neverland-- his Boy's Own private theme park with Zipper ride, and rollercoaster open all night long where the seventh of nine children slept with other children. Let me fill your heart with joy and laughter. Togetherness, that's all I'm after. A memory of twenty years ago-- the red leather jacket with all the zippers, black-face boy singing "Beat It" reinventing the Sharks and Jets for a new generation. The kids flocked to Waxie Maxie's to plunk down their bucks. Music made him free-- The memory of jack-up trousers and white socks and crotches grabbed. Ooh, baby, baby Where did our love go? Ooh, don't you want me Don't you want me no more Ooh, baby-- The cable news guys have packed up their video equipment and gone home, leaves blow in front of the gates. Waving slowly from the belltower the armband, the sequined glove. Christopher T. George Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| Michael MV
Advanced Member Username: michaelv Post Number: 905 Registered: 11-2003 |
Pale makeup today, a blank look, mutation by Surgerie. ^^ To make/echo a travestry of make-up by L'Oreal Re: A fan releases a white dove ^^ as for myself, I prefer to see this gesture performed @ a Stevie Nicks concert, and not for acquittal, but for symbolic affirmation & adoration. Like the title/pivotal conceit, but there's still perhaps more to the metaphor than meets the eye. Waving slowly from the belltower -- armband & sequined glove.  Michael (MV) | ||
| Christopher T George
Intermediate Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1231 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi MV Many thanks for your input and suggestions, <V. Much appreciated. Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| M
Moderator Username: mjm Post Number: 3120 Registered: 11-1998 |
You picked some very good lyrics for this one, Chris. Yes, that was a fine way to go. They gave me a little chill up my spine. Good revision! | ||
| Christopher T George
Intermediate Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1234 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi M Thanks, M. Glad you think the poem is effective. All my best Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp | ||
| E V Brooks
Intermediate Member Username: lia Post Number: 1134 Registered: 12-2003 |
A fine revision Chris. I can't decide if this ends positively or not.. I realise it depends on what the reader thinks of the situation that determines the interpretation of this piece.. which makes for a very clever write. Enjoyed reading this again. lia | ||
| Christopher T George
Intermediate Member Username: chrisgeorge Post Number: 1242 Registered: 12-2004 |
Hi Lia Thanks. I think the poem has become a bit more complex in revision, and ambivalent about Jackson's situation rather than judgemental. Glad you like what I have done. Thanks for your interest and support, Lia. Chris Editor, Desert Moon Review http://www.desertmoonreview.com/ http://chrisgeorge.netpublish.net/ http://www.actorssceneunseen.com/ripper.asp |
