| Author | Message | ||
| Arthur Seeley
Valued Member Username: amergin Post Number: 150 Registered: 12-2008 |
The way a crow Shook down on me The dust of snow From a hemlock tree Has given my heart A change of mood And saved some part Of a day I had rued." — Robert Frost Ignoring syllabification and rhyme I always thought this poem by Robert Frost met many of the aesthetic qualities of the haiku. Do you agree? How would you rewrite it to be closer to the haiku form? | ||
| Kathy Paupore
Moderator Username: kathy Post Number: 10907 Registered: 12-2003 |
Arthur, an interesting question. I think many poets were/are influenced by haiku. Some whether they know it or not. Some maybe inspired by another poet who was influenced by haiku. Another thought I have is that any poet who writes about nature may inadvertently have a haiku feeling to their poetry. The seasons, the observations, the aha moments. As a ku I might: a crow shook snowdust from a hemlock on my head and the second stanza I would leave off, as for me it explains too much the subtle aha of the haiku and this is not to crit Robert Frost as he's one of my favorite poets Kathy You're invited to: Wild Flowers Poetry is a way of taking life by the throat.~Robert Frost | ||
| Gary Blankenship
Moderator Username: garydawg Post Number: 27247 Registered: 07-2001 |
I agree with Kathy on the hiaku that could come out of this. With a bit of work, the second S might be used to turn the poem into a tanka. The collection the poem was in was published in 1923, so it is possible Frost knew of haiku, called hooku then. But I thought I read somewhere that he dismissed the form. Couldn't find a quote though. Smiles. Gary Celebrate Walt with Gary: http://www.poetrykit.org/pkl/tw10/tw4conte.htm | ||
| Deborah P Kolodji
Advanced Member Username: dkolodji Post Number: 1238 Registered: 04-2005 |
My suggestion as a haiku... a crow shakes in the hemlock my snow dusted hair But I also liked Kathy's version. As a tanka? Maybe.... a dusting of snow from the hemlock crow... my heart changes to love this day or something like that. | ||
| MV
Senior Member Username: michaelv Post Number: 1088 Registered: 11-2003 |
Perhaps the commonality that you perceive is the Imagistic aesthetic.  Michael (MV) | ||
| Dan Tompsett
Intermediate Member Username: db_tompsett Post Number: 319 Registered: 07-2007 |
The last line of Frost's poem sounds very forced to me. I like a couple of things Frost wrote, but I'm not much of a fan. "People who believe a lot of crap are better off." Charles Bukowski |
